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Jimmy Shaker

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3 'bout Love
« on: July 19, 2009, 11:33:27 AM »
Love Lives

Love enters our room.

Love tastes our sweat
Love inhales our breath
Love weaves our hair together.

Love looks deep into our eyes.

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Do You Love Me?

Rip out
your heart

and cast it
beating, into my hands.

I can
tear it to shreds.

I can
take each piece to pieces.

I can
put it back together, or not.

Do you love me?

Let me
rip out my heart

and cast it
beating, into your hands.

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I Love You

I Love You, she says
I Love You I Love You
over and over, the plaintive bleating of a sheep
seeking to hear the reassuring bleating of another sheep.

Just tubes to me
lubricated tubes and fleshy nodes
can't find the place that used to feel

for this sheep
that so unexpectedly becomes a wolf
shredding strips from my flesh, blood dripping from wolfy chops.

Shredded flesh.
I'm becoming misogynistic, sociopathic
hope it's only temporary, a shivering as breezes stir my shreds.

Meanwhile
to amuse myself
I will lose myself
in lubricated tubes, pliant fleshy nodes

and bleat: one,
and two, and, I Love You
and repeat, brightly now; I Love You, I Love You.

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ms_spelt

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Re: 3 'bout Love
« Reply #1 on: July 21, 2009, 08:15:06 AM »
"let me ri[p out my heart and cast it beating into your hands"
is my favorite line.
"this is the law of the jungle-as old and as true as the sky.
every wolf that keeps it shall prosper-every wolf that does not must die
like the creeper the girdles the tree trunk,the law circles forward and back
the strength of the pack is the wolf and the strength of the wolf is the pack"

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Re: 3 'bout Love
« Reply #2 on: July 30, 2009, 06:36:42 PM »
i dig the honesty in "I Love You" - the bleating, and localized masturbatory aspects of loosing touch. 

cheers,
westcoast

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Re: 3 'bout Love
« Reply #3 on: July 30, 2009, 07:17:18 PM »
I love how you turned the "plaintive bleating of a sheep" to a piece of victim's comfort. A beautiful prelude to the toothed edge that follows.